Commenting on other peoples blog

The comments←The link

I have highlighted the helpful comments in Blue, and the least helpful comments in purple.

My rating for the comments out of five.

Comment 1- 1/5 because most of the comment was spelled incorrectly and there was a lot of slang language.

Comment 2- 5/5 because he was very polite in his comment and very good punctuation.

Comment 3- 5/5  Because she told him that she found his review and gave him positive feedback.

Comment 4- 1/5 She didn’t put capital letters on the nouns and a lot of misspelled words.

Comment 5- 5/5 Also gave her very good feedback and told her how her post was inspirational.

Comment 6- 3/5 Lots of slang language.

Comment 7- 2/5 not very detailed but correct spelling.

Comment 8- 4/5 Because I don’t think that she should be interfering with things that don’t involve her.










I absolutely LOVED the experience of making my avatar!

Some challenges I had were:

. there were only limited choices on the appearance of my avatar, so that made it hard for me to make the avatar look like me

let me tell you what I look like:

I have really curly hair,  big brown eyes, a superhero chin and a big smile.

Overall it was a very fun activity and I really enjoyed it.


200 word writing challenge

There was once a crow lived in the forest and was absolutely satisfied in life. but one day he saw a swan. “this swan is so white”, he thought,” and I’m so black. this swan must be the happiest bird in the world”.

he expressed his thoughts to the swan. “Actually,” the swan replied, “I was feeling that I was the happiest bird around until I saw a parrot, which has two colours. so I now think that the parrot is the happiest bird in creation.” then the crow approached the parrot. the parrot explained, “I lived very happily until I saw a peacock. I only have two colours however the peacock has multiple.”

the crow then visited a peacock in the zoo and saw that hundreds of people had gathered to see him. After the people had left, the crow approached the peacock. “dear peacock,” the crow said, “you are so beautiful. every day thousands of people come to see you. When people see me, they immediately shoo me away. I think you are the happiest bird on the planet.”

the peacock replied, “I always thought that I was the most beautiful and happy bird on the planet. But despite that because of all my beauty, I’m entrapped in this zoo. I have examined the zoo carefully, and I have realised that the crow is the only bird not kept in a cage. so for the past few days, I have been thinking that if I were a crow I would happily roam everywhere.”